Until 4 months ago I'd never been to Loch Ness .It was a such beautiful spot that I will never forget it .Personally,I think it's worth travelling to and want to go there again.If you went there,you would have a good time.Because it has fresh air and beautiful view.It depends.If you went there in summer,you would look at the green mountain,but otherwise you went there in winter,you would see the snow on the mountain.It's absolutely beautiful!!!
Hi Wendy,
ReplyDeleteThanks for the post. I've never been to Loch Ness and would absolutely love to go there, so it was useful to hear your recommendation. It sounds really amazing! How long did you go there for?
Your post is a bit too short, although you use some very good language here so well done for that. Very good use of past perfect with until, such...that, worth travelling, absolutely, it depends + if + otherwise etc. Really sounds good. Just a few things to fix up:
- 'Personally,I think it's worth travelling TO'
- 'want to GO THERE again.
- 'you would have a good time BECAUSE IT HAS fresh air and beautiful viewS' (it's better to use 'because' in the middle of sentences, rather than at the beginning of a sentence).
- 'It dependS'.
- 'If you went there in summer,you would look at the green mountain,otherwise you would see the snow on the mountain' (you can cut the rest of the sentence. If you use 'otherwise', you don't need to use 'if' again).
Overall, a really nice piece, although try to write a bit more next time. We are going to be doing some longer, more academic writing next so you can practise!
Rui
By the way I love the pictures! It looks like such a beautiful place!
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